Inside a Day
#9
Very, very good, methinks. Just regarding meter and such, I can only offer two thoughts for improvement. My brain would find it more melodious if it were "I found..." in the second last sentence and "...shores..." plural in the last.
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Inside a Day - by RichardBosten - 11-23-2025, 04:52 AM
RE: Inside a Day - by dukealien - 11-23-2025, 05:42 AM
RE: Inside a Day - by RichardBosten - 11-23-2025, 05:57 AM
RE: Inside a Day - by evanbedford_dot_com - 12-11-2025, 11:16 AM



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