In His Name, I am None
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I would say ignore Busker's criticisms. Your poem is 99% perfect in terms of readability and in terms of your feelings showing through. The 1% that doesn't quite make the grade is this line, where the meter doesn't quite match: "His voice drowned each breath I drew,"
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In His Name, I am None - by Mostly Holy - 11-13-2025, 10:09 AM
RE: In His Name, I am None - by MidaPoems - 11-14-2025, 06:12 AM
RE: In His Name, I am None - by Mostly Holy - 11-14-2025, 06:45 AM
RE: In His Name, I am None - by MidaPoems - 11-14-2025, 07:38 AM
RE: In His Name, I am None - by busker - 11-15-2025, 08:01 PM
RE: In His Name, I am None - by evanbedford_dot_com - 12-09-2025, 12:36 PM
RE: In His Name, I am None - by Mostly Holy - 12-09-2025, 09:26 PM
RE: In His Name, I am None - by thewilderhen - 12-10-2025, 12:14 PM
RE: In His Name, I am None - by Mostly Holy - 12-10-2025, 08:10 PM
RE: In His Name, I am None - by Nachtfrost - Yesterday, 12:28 AM



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