12-09-2025, 12:27 PM
I commend you for tackling such a tough subject. An important subject. An incredibly interesting subject. Please keep at it.
For criticism, I'd say that I'd love to see more strict attention paid to meter and rhyme (eg, Nam doesn't exactly rhyme with calm).
Here's a superb one on the same subject that I've copied from National Lampoon (1972 Best of) about the My Lai Massacre:
Willy Calley, pudding and pie
Shot the boys and made them die.
When the girls came to surrender,
Willey just ignored their gender.
Written by Michael O'Donoghue from SNL fame. When I first read it many years ago, I immediately committed it to memory. And because it was so well written, it was EASY to remember.
Too much poetic CRAP written these days. What we need it more Michael O'Donoghues. The subject matter is just waiting for genius. For raw material, how about the two drug smugglers clinging to a boat, hoping that Pete Hegseth doesn't waste them? Just saying.
For criticism, I'd say that I'd love to see more strict attention paid to meter and rhyme (eg, Nam doesn't exactly rhyme with calm).
Here's a superb one on the same subject that I've copied from National Lampoon (1972 Best of) about the My Lai Massacre:
Willy Calley, pudding and pie
Shot the boys and made them die.
When the girls came to surrender,
Willey just ignored their gender.
Written by Michael O'Donoghue from SNL fame. When I first read it many years ago, I immediately committed it to memory. And because it was so well written, it was EASY to remember.
Too much poetic CRAP written these days. What we need it more Michael O'Donoghues. The subject matter is just waiting for genius. For raw material, how about the two drug smugglers clinging to a boat, hoping that Pete Hegseth doesn't waste them? Just saying.