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[whisperer]

Welcome to the beautiful and painful and rewarding and stressful world of poetry and welcome to The Pig Pen. You're off to a great start. Your piece has some powerful and painful language. I get images of trying to please another person but somehow falling short. It's a beautiful and painful and very real message. As for polishing, that's all in the editing. That's why we show it to other writers and see what they think and go back to the lab and tinker, or smash it and build something new. That's the beauty of all this. Back to your piece, again wonderful imagery and wording and the piece flows nicely, except for the third line. The line is a bit clunky and the "But" suggests a conjecture that is hard to see. Try it without the "but" and some punctuation to finish the previous line to separate the two lines and  see if that works. Other than that, you're on a wonderful path. Keep writing and expressing and tinkering and toiling. Thank you for sharing.