The Sieved Scales

[whisperer]

This is a tight piece. Your meter and rhyme scheme is on point and consistent. I would leave the "burning" as it fits your meter perfectly. However, poetry rules are there to be broken. Which brings me to your last stanza. You veer away from your rhyming scheme. I'm not sure if that was intentional, but it does tarnish the tightness of the rest of the piece. Also, the first line of the last stanza misses your meter a bit. Again, not sure if that was intentional. Other than that, great imagery, wonderful word choices and a great flow with the rhyme scheme and meter. Well done. Thanks for sharing.