Winter Ballad
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(12-05-2025, 12:36 AM)Mostly Holy Wrote:  What a lovely poem! I think you have nailed the meter, tho I tend to want to read "A melody so true." as two iambs followed by a Pyrrhic, or a soft iamb, "ME-lo-DY" naturally carries two heavy stresses I think, and if you wanted to make it firmly iambic trimeter, perhaps you could swap "true" for a word that ends on a mute, to force a heavier stress there?
Thanks  . 
Ill look at ending with a mute . May be tricky to fit the rhyme scheme .
I could make it more contrasting to illustrate a change(winters melody) Or use a dash.
 I am just trying to better grasp Scansion which is how i noticed it .
I don't mind the way it reads at all. It makes sense there, but i want to learn from it.

Thanks again !
I see it now . I think it is a soft iamb "so true"
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Winter Ballad - by RichardBosten - 12-04-2025, 11:26 PM
RE: Winter Ballad - by Mostly Holy - 12-05-2025, 12:36 AM
RE: Winter Ballad - by RichardBosten - 12-05-2025, 04:12 AM
RE: Winter Ballad - by busker - 12-05-2025, 06:29 PM
RE: Winter Ballad - by RichardBosten - 12-06-2025, 12:14 AM



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