LPiA-25 Nov. 16
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Trapped shores

Sand,
quicksand.

Sinking to drowning.
Pushed into water,
pulled down under.

Plundered in depths,
pressure building —
body on a thread,
oxygen barely left.

The shore,
a trap.
I, the victim.

Air
 d
  epleted,
life
    exceeded.

I know that rhyme, rhythm, and meter are not academically standardized.
I am well aware of that, yet I primarily do free verse, and it's based on instinctual writing.
I try to avoid academic language or structure. My poems are not meant to convey a single answer.
I try to convey the unknown through minimalism, mostly dense short stanzas with many line breaks.
If you'd give a critique, please keep this in mind.
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