LPiA-25 Nov. 10
#12
Movie night

The high heels,
the skirt I deemed too short -
Eyes stuck to you, like glue.

The woolly sweater,
Made for colder weather.
On the hottest day
To take it off,
Wool an - itching flame -
Falls between the couch cushions.

A pullover, I see.
Sweatpants for you -
And me?

On the couch
Watching TV,
I watch you
Enjoying,
You see?

She rests her head,
Right before we go to bed.
Screen, black.
You scratch your head,
Diving under the covers,
Covering me
With love.
I know that rhyme, rhythm, and meter are not academically standardized.
I am well aware of that, yet I primarily do free verse, and it's based on instinctual writing.
I try to avoid academic language or structure. My poems are not meant to convey a single answer.
I try to convey the unknown through minimalism, mostly dense short stanzas with many line breaks.
If you'd give a critique, please keep this in mind.
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LPiA-25 Nov. 10 - by Tiger the Lion - 11-10-2025, 10:32 AM
RE: LPiA-25 Nov. 10 - by CRNDLSM - 11-10-2025, 10:58 AM
RE: LPiA-25 Nov. 10 - by Todd - 11-10-2025, 01:26 PM
RE: LPiA-25 Nov. 10 - by Mostly Holy - 11-10-2025, 09:18 PM
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RE: LPiA-25 Nov. 10 - by Mark A Becker - 11-10-2025, 11:19 PM
RE: LPiA-25 Nov. 10 - by Todd - 11-10-2025, 11:29 PM
RE: LPiA-25 Nov. 10 - by dukealien - 11-11-2025, 12:27 AM
RE: LPiA-25 Nov. 10 - by rowens - 11-11-2025, 01:04 AM
RE: LPiA-25 Nov. 10 - by Keith - 11-12-2025, 02:44 AM
RE: LPiA-25 Nov. 10 - by rowens - 11-13-2025, 09:08 AM
RE: LPiA-25 Nov. 10 - by MidaPoems - 11-15-2025, 05:17 AM



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