Love's Way

[billy]

Glad you liked the imagery Addy. and enjoyed the poem. thanks folks, guess I have to look at this more closely. Have to school-up on what really defines cliche'. chuckle chuckle

lots has been said about cliche, or commonly used phrases being used in a poem.

my take is this;

one or two if intended is okay, can lend a certain ambiance to a piece. more than that and it's coming from what we've read. not what we've imagined ourselves.

the odds are if you've heard it said before, it a cliche.

things like;
summer breeze
cloudy skies
blood red rose
cold to the bones
raging waters
deep waters

sad smile
luscious lips
sweating brow
firm grip
salty sea

instead of these and others like them we need to make our own inage come to life with an original metaphor or idea.

as salty as a pirates shorts.

lips like jello/jelly depending where you come from.

the smile of a prune,
the smile of dead sunflower
the smile of a rose opening to the stars

the sea was ridden
by white stallions cresting
mile high walls of steel water
on hooves of thunder

often we/i tend to fall into the pretty hall mark trap.
nice flowery words that we see on the inside of a card.
if we search a little some of our phrases have been said a gazillion times

words like love and beauty were old school, used to infinity and beyond.
whenever possible instead of saying beauty or love, we need to show it.

Bianca encompassed me
like the startled dust motes
filling a sunbeam

Adele filled me
carried my ambition
in a pouch near her breast

next to Biance
a gazelle has no grace
next to Bianca
a god has no power

Next to billy
the buffoon looks like a great catch

all a cliche is, is a well worn phrase or group of words you've heard or read a lot of times.