10-15-2025, 07:55 PM
(10-14-2025, 01:48 AM)Deor Ana Log Wrote: This poem is interesting and engaging, but would benefit by having more line breaks. This makes each word both more impactful, and consise, instead of six lines long lines. Are we attacking those that with harmful and passive intentions more with realizing? I would love you to expand on this question in a revision. Keep writing the revising, because the vision is already great!Thanks for your feedback. I'd love to hear your opinion on my revised version.