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And the World Hastened itself towards Death
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03-23-2025, 08:43 AM
I like the swooping building of the words, but I'm stuck on the format, a little too paragraphy, fpr instance a line ends with 'wings of a' but there's not enough clever enjambment throughout i think to justify it, why line breaks at all? I would give more, but I'm stuck
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And the World Hastened itself towards Death - by CreamcheeseSandwich - 03-23-2025, 06:33 AM
RE: And the World Hastened itself towards Death - by CRNDLSM - 03-23-2025, 08:43 AM
RE: And the World Hastened itself towards Death - by CreamcheeseSandwich - 03-31-2025, 04:32 AM
RE: And the World Hastened itself towards Death - by depressedmetalhead - 04-02-2025, 03:19 AM
RE: And the World Hastened itself towards Death - by The_system_screams - 04-06-2025, 09:24 AM
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