01-14-2025, 11:47 PM
(01-14-2025, 05:02 AM)TrevorConway Wrote: Among the great exponents of scienceI like the story you've told here, i just feel as though it suffered from being too clinical, the repetition of Waksman didn't really help the last stanza and I think the poem would work better with the 'reveal' being right at the very end.
are those who grapple hard for gloryand those who find it snatched away,with names confined to dusty books,brief mentions, at best;and few, if any, hear their story: - don't need this stanza, the rest of the poem implies thisAlbert Schatz, entranced by soil; - this seems like a good starting point, I like the poetic language in this stanzahe mulched his way through masses of muckand found a microbe he supposedcould halt the charge of tuberculosis.Within a matter of months,a saviour appeared: streptomycin.His supervisor, one Selman Waksman,assumed control of the clinical trials.Waksman and received a Nobel Prize,and As for Schatz,long after Waksman’s death,he earned a kind of mangled amends:the American Society for Microbiologybestowed on him its highest award:the Selman Waksman medal,
named after the supervisor who...
I had written a much more comprehensive reply but the internet stole it, so that's why this one may seem so brief.
wae aye man ye radgie
