12-10-2024, 02:02 PM
(12-10-2024, 12:47 PM)ton321 Wrote: The Red Fish.Well done. Good use of vernacular to convey subtext, much I had to look up, but that's on me. Made some suggestions above. consider a more meaningful title.
When my father swore at cars
after his wife had died wife vs mother?
that cut across him
in Seventies Wakefield
it was always pillock or pilchard
that reminded me of the fish my grandfather gave me
mixed up in re-used margarine tubs
daubed in malt vinegar
even now I can spend entire afternoons
thinking about the difference between sardines and pilchards
or herrings and rollmops
the way necessity gravitates between (not a big fan of 'necessity' but fate seems too obvious.)
to a swerve of the road or the dart of a fin.
bryn

