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[Valerie Please]

Thank you WW, this is helpful feedback

Touch the earth,
face in the dirt:
A silent ball
breaking, wailing,
but also
waiting.

This evokes a sense of beautiful longing, the hope of a light at the end of a tunnel. I was also a bit confused by your choice to use “ball” - perhaps “shell”? And I think “touch the earth” is a little gentle compared to the rest of the poem. I think something more striking or visceral would make a bigger impact. 

Maybe: 

Ground in the earth
Face in the dirt 

Or:

Consumed by the earth,
Face in the dirt
A silent shell;
Breaking, wailing,
Waiting.