09-06-2024, 11:12 PM
Bunx,
You have music in you. I think that a tendency to rhyme comes natural to people who live by rhythm.
If I have to give feedback: I'll say that when you realize that your mind and feelings are rhyming, and it feels so natural, with poetry, that is a good time to stop and
kinda disrupt the flow. I think that really good lines of poetry often come when you break the bouncy rhyming flow and say to yourself: This is coming too easy.
I need to stop and do something novel and beyond my normal, day to day thoughts with this.
It feels kind of like a hard carving in your mind. You stop, and play with the sonics and meanings of words. This makes the poetry richer.
You have music in you. I think that a tendency to rhyme comes natural to people who live by rhythm.
If I have to give feedback: I'll say that when you realize that your mind and feelings are rhyming, and it feels so natural, with poetry, that is a good time to stop and
kinda disrupt the flow. I think that really good lines of poetry often come when you break the bouncy rhyming flow and say to yourself: This is coming too easy.
I need to stop and do something novel and beyond my normal, day to day thoughts with this.
It feels kind of like a hard carving in your mind. You stop, and play with the sonics and meanings of words. This makes the poetry richer.