The Animal

[Knot]

Hi James.

Yes, struggling with that, I don't think I like the repetition of "it" either

I'd suggest reinstating 'The Animal' in the text, but changing the title.

This is probably an British thing, and an old thing,

As an old British thing myself I recall (just about) the Rag and Bone men, but that stretch to 'colour of sand' escaped me (my association would be more with the metal than the cloth.) Perhaps one solution would be to begin the verse with 'rags and bone' (it follows on quite neatly from the end of S1)? Shellac is still a problem though, isn't it? Feels a bit to old fashioned for the post-apocalypse, and a quick search showed a bewildering array of colours (much like sand grains under a microscope, granted, but it still seems a stretch.)

I quite like this opening as to me it, like Shute's The Beach, describes a character looking out, waiting for the end, so to speak.

Sure, but that's also what's happening in S2, isn't it?

Best, Knot

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