07-22-2024, 08:44 PM
Thanks Knot, good critique.
What can I say, there is an awful lot of dust there, but I'll think on it. Yes, there should not be a period there. My eyes are so bad I probably thought it was a comma. Yeah, I was probably being over-indulgent with the long tie coffin's passage.
"Not sure how they 'reflect' - is it adding anything?"
The white of the chalk and the red of the dirt, red and white, saints and sinners. Looking back I see that is not very clear.
Maybe it should be "Roman columns." I used what I used to try to imply fake verses real. I'll work on that.
Can't be "Purgatory" because these are protestant churches. That's where the "Roman columns" come in. It's kind of an architectural indicator of what kind of church it is. Seeing as this is Texas (identified by way of the last picture show reference) those columns generally identify it as a Southern Baptist church. That and the prayer meeting reference.
Just three clothing stores ( your right I'll change the quote marks) “Turner’s” “Johnson’s” and “Chatterley’s.” I'm thinking of adding "nearly always empty."
Anyway, all good things to consider. Thanks.
dale
What can I say, there is an awful lot of dust there, but I'll think on it. Yes, there should not be a period there. My eyes are so bad I probably thought it was a comma. Yeah, I was probably being over-indulgent with the long tie coffin's passage.
"Not sure how they 'reflect' - is it adding anything?"
The white of the chalk and the red of the dirt, red and white, saints and sinners. Looking back I see that is not very clear.
Maybe it should be "Roman columns." I used what I used to try to imply fake verses real. I'll work on that.
Can't be "Purgatory" because these are protestant churches. That's where the "Roman columns" come in. It's kind of an architectural indicator of what kind of church it is. Seeing as this is Texas (identified by way of the last picture show reference) those columns generally identify it as a Southern Baptist church. That and the prayer meeting reference.
Just three clothing stores ( your right I'll change the quote marks) “Turner’s” “Johnson’s” and “Chatterley’s.” I'm thinking of adding "nearly always empty."
Anyway, all good things to consider. Thanks.
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.