Untitled but seeking critique

[Quixilated]

(Don’t re-post. Just tell me where you want it and I’ll move it for you. We prefer not to have multiple threads posted of the same poem. If you want to split the difference, you could put it in moderate. Basic critique doesn’t usually go very in-depth. Moderate allows more flexibility in either direction. It’s completely up to you, just let me know via pm.)

—Quix/admin