07-16-2024, 09:53 PM
This might be a thornbush for me.
This poem sucks and I hate it, but it’s also wonderful and I love it.
It belongs in basic.
That’s not because it’s basic, it’s because it needs hammering, not chiseling.
If I had my way, I’d like this posted in basic in three chunks. Post a chunk, get it better, post the next chunk, get it better, etc. That should take four months. Then publish the whole aggressive weird imagistic noble nightmare all at once in serious. We’ll make a day of it. Slyvia Day.
There’s a good poem here. It’s keen and interesting and awake.
This stanza,
“When the rain falls,
is it comfort or calamity to be quenched in a soggy skirt?
My red highlights glistening amongst the green,
tantalizing all the forest.”
Is good.
But it’s also purple prose desperate to escape junior high English, and it hardly makes sense.
But it’s good.
Stay with us. Making this poem good is what we do.
Repost the first two stanzas in basic.
This poem sucks and I hate it, but it’s also wonderful and I love it.
It belongs in basic.
That’s not because it’s basic, it’s because it needs hammering, not chiseling.
If I had my way, I’d like this posted in basic in three chunks. Post a chunk, get it better, post the next chunk, get it better, etc. That should take four months. Then publish the whole aggressive weird imagistic noble nightmare all at once in serious. We’ll make a day of it. Slyvia Day.
There’s a good poem here. It’s keen and interesting and awake.
This stanza,
“When the rain falls,
is it comfort or calamity to be quenched in a soggy skirt?
My red highlights glistening amongst the green,
tantalizing all the forest.”
Is good.
But it’s also purple prose desperate to escape junior high English, and it hardly makes sense.
But it’s good.
Stay with us. Making this poem good is what we do.
Repost the first two stanzas in basic.
A yak is normal.