For my son

[Miley]

In this life
in which the dancing slows all 
too soon

You will walk
under the white chalk of 
the moon

You will see
the darkness there, mingled with 
the light

And you will know
that what you already have, close in
is what’s right

Reminds me a bit of this short Emily Dickinson poem https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/5...-hour-1292
Otherwise I made some suggestions for some cuts, I think you probably have a certain meter in mind that these small cuts would disturb, but I just put them through things that I felt were unnecessary or cumbersome. 

My favorite line is "under the white chalk of" because I think this chalky description of the moon is evocative. I think you could try to be more specific, a good bit of poem reads as cliched 2 me. The dichotomy of darkness/light for example. In the last two stanzas, for example, maybe an image that mingles darkness with light (the moon thing beings to do this but maybe there is something more.. idiosyncratic?)  and perhaps the last stanza would be more interesting shown as opposed to told. As in, if you could make the reader think/feel the sentiment of the last stanza through a poetic observation or image?  I think the sentiment of the poem is sweet, especially with the title.

Just my 2 cents! Thnx for sharing/