Departures

[flotsson]

Today
    my skin
    accepts
    the pollen
      alone amongst
       smells of returning
         home  stickily humid The double space here may be intentional in order to divide two ideas, but consider a line brake or a change of indentation to keep with the formatting of the rest of the poem. More, to my ear, stickily sounds a bit awkward as well as a bit of a cliche. 
         spunk of grass
         greedy and green and damp and furled I'm not sure what the referent of this symbol is, but the imagery is palpable.
         everything
     I've been given
Regarding the first stanza as a whole, there are a lot of repeated "s" sounds until line 8 contributing to a slight feeling of unease, to my ear. I enjoy the formatting of the lines, almost as if one is rambling through a field.
 On the other side
of the planet
those frail leaf-lace things I could just be bad at reading, but I'm not sure what this line refers to. You might consider using a more evocative term than "things"
everything
    I've given you To my taste, I disagree with the previous critique, the everything here mirrors well the last two lines of the first stanza, which connects the two stanzas beautifully; the formatting of the two stanzas, the language and the length of the lines create such a strong juxtaposition, I feel that if you didn't keep these two lines --as well, the two in the previous stanza-- there would be little to cohere the poem.
the transformed browns and violets
so out of place
in airport terminals
with ceilings like palaces
somehow emptier
than sky

I may just be bad at reading this poem, but the figurative language feels really personal, and it's hard for me to find anything to grab onto. My reading is further frustrated by the terse lines without punctuation, which adds no small amount of ambiguity. That being said, the poem reads to me as having an overpowering nostalgic melancholy that resonates with me deeply; I find this piece to be quite emotionally compelling.