cream of wheat (edit 1)

[busker]

cream of wheat

and when she tottered
upright for the first time—

what was her name?
it hides under soot
that i can’t brush away.

“i” is a funny word.
didn’t “i” have something more? - a tad heavy handed 

who’s at the door?
just the person come to fix
my cream of wheat.
He goes through the motions
and places down my mush.  …. Maybe have the person as a “she” to suggest it’s the daughter in S1?

I fill my face
while he sighs,
looking down
at his wrist.

cream of wheat

and when she tottered
upright for the first time—

what was her name?
it hides in the haze
that i can’t brush away—
along with her face.

“i” is a funny word.
didn’t “i” have something more?

who’s at the door?
just
the person from outside
come to fix my
cream of wheat.

now I fill my face while
he sighs and
looks at his wrist. 

The revision reads quite well 
Nice one