cream of wheat (edit 1)

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cream of wheat

and when she tottered
upright for the first time—         .........I like these thin cut-aways from the main thoughts or bulkier stanzas. More emphasis should be put between them to make the                                                                           fragmented line of thought more apparent.
what was her name?
it hides in the haze                           .........Tall Grass? Describing brain fog as a haze sounds generic. 
that i can’t brush away—                      
along with her face.                          ..........This line breaks flow for me. I do not think it is necessary.

“i” is a funny word.
didn’t “i” have something more?             

who’s at the door?                                           
the person from outside                    
who comes to fix my                            ...........This is a regular occurance, right?
cream of wheat.

now I fill my face and                     ..........For better flow. I did not mess around with line breaks too much.
he sighs, looking
down at his wrist.                        ........Could be his caretaker. My head cannon is that the man is his son. Makes for a good twist.

 

An Alzheimer's patient attempts to remember his children. He has trouble keeping his train of thought constant. Aside from that, I did not gleam much else. 

Thanks for posting, 
SC