A New Wrinkle (edit4)

[Knot]

Hi duke,
it still seems to falter in the same places (even though it reads better.)

What's 'weary rage' and how is it that different from 'embittered'?
I keep thinking there's a place for shall I close my eyes in there somewhere.

Also, 'decades' - I don't think it's helping the piece. Not a suggested replacement, rather a nudge to look in a different direction (and elaborate on the fold/image of the fold)
a noose that has been tightening since my birth–


Best, Knot


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