02-24-2024, 12:41 AM
Hi duke,
like the title, beginning and end (changing 'shadowed' to 'shaded' is a nice touch) but the middle seems ... well, confusing (to me.)
'rage' seems to be (initially) a(n over) reaction to a perceived 'oriental' feature (in contrast to 'occidental birth') and I can't see why that would matter, especially if it is simply simply a 'sign of growing old'.
Any way to cut those two lines and, instead, hint at what N's answer to their own question might be?
Best, Knot
.
like the title, beginning and end (changing 'shadowed' to 'shaded' is a nice touch) but the middle seems ... well, confusing (to me.)
'rage' seems to be (initially) a(n over) reaction to a perceived 'oriental' feature (in contrast to 'occidental birth') and I can't see why that would matter, especially if it is simply simply a 'sign of growing old'.
Any way to cut those two lines and, instead, hint at what N's answer to their own question might be?
Best, Knot
.