IIce Challenge #2 - Spinning Brains
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(01-26-2024, 07:35 PM)rayheinrich Wrote:  
(01-18-2024, 02:07 PM)Wjames Wrote:  A string slides across your leg as you unfasten
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kissing the damp filter.

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I am hoping the other three items are a cold beer, a silver american half-dollar, and a corn dog.
I was thinking the poems would just weave the physical objects into the poem,
but you worked the entire bags parable into your poem. What a great idea,
I'm going to change my poem to include the bags in the body of my poem
as well.

Corn dogs, cold beer, and the Yankee dollar... I'm thinking your hopes have
been realized.

"A string slides across your leg as you unfasten the loops of a black velvet pouch",
"the neck of a model from Wakiki, wielding sun as moon", "red lipstick kissing
the damp filter" and all the mentions of body parts... I'm sitting here in a boring
room sitting on a dull chair and yet I'm overcome with sensuous emotions.
Wonderful.
Thanks Ray.

Including the bag was moreso about having no ideas if I'm being honest. 

I couldn't think of a subject for a poem, so I just followed what the prompt said to do: open up a sack(s), and see what's inside.
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RE: IIce Challenge #2 - Spinning Brains - by Wjames - 01-27-2024, 07:33 AM



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