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[Lizzie]

To me, meaning or lyricism aren't what makes a poem succesful, feeling is - and feeling often isn't clear. Lyricism and meaning can enhance feeling, but to me they are tools towards that end, not the end itself. Of course, these last two sentences are a sorry bit of mumbo jumbo.

I think I might try and add  another verse or two to this one if I can.

I think that we're saying the same thing, essentially. As far as eliciting feeling, yes meaning and lyricism work together to that end. In terms of your POV, are you hoping to get the reader to feel a specific feeling or just a feeling?