Pillar and Fire - edit2

[dukealien]

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Many early mornings to the south
I see a rising pillar of white cloud
superimposed, lean mushroom or lone flower,
on fading stars or rainbow-borrowed blue.

Like that in the Testament this sign
shows presence of unseen, upholding power:
an ark of electricity which warms
and cools and unifies each hearth and heart.

It does not move or nightly shine with fire–
its deep reactor rages silently
as moderated, unconsumed, it glows
invisibly in covenant restraint.

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Thanks for the encouraging critique.  You pinpointed the rough spots - I can tell because they were the two most modified during prior revisions.

The puzzling "season of the year" business was

an attempt to explain why the reactor heat exchanger-clearing (or whatever it is) cloud of water vapor is sometimes against near-darkness and stars, sometimes against blue sky:  because in winter the sun comes up later

but that was really too convoluted and passed up an opportunity to paint some more pictures 

I'd like a better word than "unifies,"  that would express networking or the grid, but it hasn't come yet.

Re Dylan Thomas:  some borrowings are more brazen than others.  I once concluded an essay on Social Security with,

"...consists of a carrot and a stick, and the string between them is fraud."  Recognize it?