10-06-2023, 12:04 AM
The last two lines are splendid. The rest feels like a brainstorm -- a rough draft to be fleshed out later. But, I know that minimalism is more your style these days.
The image does look a little ghostly, like there's something swirling around above the street.
I'm assuming that this is Alice from wonderland, but I have no reason to think that. Although, I do wonder now if maybe she was a real person. Whether it's a beloved book character or a beloved daughter/mother/sister, it's sad all the same. It does seem that there's a hint at the end that death isn't really this terrible thing, more just a thing.
I dispute this notion that poetry cannot be multimedia. Is that you talking, or was that someone else's opinion?
This morning, it's half an English muffin that my daughter didn't finish.
And coffee. Always coffee. Too much and never enough.
The image does look a little ghostly, like there's something swirling around above the street.
I'm assuming that this is Alice from wonderland, but I have no reason to think that. Although, I do wonder now if maybe she was a real person. Whether it's a beloved book character or a beloved daughter/mother/sister, it's sad all the same. It does seem that there's a hint at the end that death isn't really this terrible thing, more just a thing.
I dispute this notion that poetry cannot be multimedia. Is that you talking, or was that someone else's opinion?
This morning, it's half an English muffin that my daughter didn't finish.
And coffee. Always coffee. Too much and never enough.