Random Prompt #9
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(08-24-2023, 06:29 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote:  
(08-23-2023, 01:17 AM)Lizzie Wrote:  Circle

you'd been gone for five years.

by three vines of English ivy.

Her stone says 1 8 7 6-1 9 0 5,

and leave the two behind;

It played four times that night
as we came full (circle)   love how this line ties back to the title
You actually did include all of the numbers 0-9. Clever girl.

There's more to this piece every time I read it.

-Mark
There's more circles/cycles, although some of it's a little tortured (like the water cycle). 

I can't decide if I like this piece. It's too up its own ass trying to be clever -- a bit cloying. 

Thanks for the reads, all the same.
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Messages In This Thread
Random Prompt #9 - by Tiger the Lion - 08-22-2023, 12:32 AM
RE: Random Prompt #9 - by Quixilated - 08-22-2023, 01:55 AM
RE: Random Prompt #9 - by Tiger the Lion - 08-22-2023, 02:07 AM
RE: Random Prompt #9 - by Quixilated - 08-22-2023, 02:20 AM
RE: Random Prompt #9 - by Wjames - 08-22-2023, 09:01 AM
RE: Random Prompt #9 - by Tiger the Lion - 08-22-2023, 09:23 AM
RE: Random Prompt #9 - by TranquillityBase - 08-22-2023, 07:41 PM
RE: Random Prompt #9 - by Mark A Becker - 08-22-2023, 09:24 PM
RE: Random Prompt #9 - by dukealien - 08-22-2023, 10:22 PM
RE: Random Prompt #9 - by Lizzie - 08-23-2023, 01:17 AM
RE: Random Prompt #9 - by Mark A Becker - 08-23-2023, 05:28 AM
RE: Random Prompt #9 - by Mark A Becker - 08-24-2023, 06:29 AM
RE: Random Prompt #9 - by Lizzie - 08-24-2023, 06:38 AM
RE: Random Prompt #9 - by Tiger the Lion - 08-24-2023, 06:48 AM
RE: Random Prompt #9 - by Tiger the Lion - 08-23-2023, 02:24 AM
RE: Random Prompt #9 - by Tiger the Lion - 08-24-2023, 06:37 AM
RE: Random Prompt #9 - by Mark A Becker - 08-24-2023, 06:53 AM



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