(hidden message)

[Quixilated]

(message in a bottle)

hi sweetie
thanks
for holding me close
to your heart

now smile

I like sweet love poems like this where it’s a snapshot of the everyday love of real people.  I do like it better knowing the backstory.  Perhaps I am too literal, but the title made me think of an actual message in a bottle (as in found on a beach by a stranger), so I was very confused until you explained. I know it’s suppose to be a short poem, but the part about hiding the messages and waiting for them to be found makes the poem so much sweeter and gives it depth.  Is there a way to put that knowledge into the poem for the reader (in only a few words)? That knowledge would also add clarity to the “message in a bottle” title.  Or does making it longer mess up the form too much?