The Bore Confesses - edit
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Old age distresses:
remembering stories, but not
which I’ve told to whom.



Yes, that last line was weak.  Hope this is a better twist (more information).

At the risk of being defensive,


Remember, this is a self-confessed bore, one who (unlike an even older gentleman per @TranquilityBase) is aware of how he's slipping... and it hurts.  Not an Ambrose Bierce bore (per The Devil's Dictionary) who is someone who talks when we whish he'd listen instead.


(07-22-2023, 05:44 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote:  Hello duke-

It's been awhile, and I'm glad to read you again.

Not to be a bore, but I'd prefer to see that last line offer a bit more of a twist to the first two.  Don't think you need the title, either. Only minor quibbles, though- I'll live

Good to see ya around,
Mark
I haven't been gone, just lurking and playing at a different hobby - surprisingly time-consuming.  Now to get back on the critique train...
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Messages In This Thread
The Bore Confesses - edit - by dukealien - 07-21-2023, 11:12 PM
RE: The Bore Confesses - by brynmawr1 - 07-22-2023, 12:29 AM
RE: The Bore Confesses - by TranquillityBase - 07-22-2023, 05:28 AM
RE: The Bore Confesses - by Mark A Becker - 07-22-2023, 05:44 AM
RE: The Bore Confesses - by dukealien - 07-23-2023, 01:09 AM



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