07-23-2023, 01:09 AM
edit;
Old age distresses:
remembering stories, but not
which I’ve told to whom.
Yes, that last line was weak. Hope this is a better twist (more information).
At the risk of being defensive,
Old age distresses:
remembering stories, but not
which I’ve told to whom.
Yes, that last line was weak. Hope this is a better twist (more information).
At the risk of being defensive,
(07-22-2023, 05:44 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote: Hello duke-I haven't been gone, just lurking and playing at a different hobby - surprisingly time-consuming. Now to get back on the critique train...
It's been awhile, and I'm glad to read you again.
Not to be a bore, but I'd prefer to see that last line offer a bit more of a twist to the first two. Don't think you need the title, either. Only minor quibbles, though- I'll live
Good to see ya around,
Mark
Non-practicing atheist

