Daze of Divinity // End of Daze

[Bunx]

Hey Knot!
Thanks aton for the thoughtful critique. I was thinking
how this poem the same thing about how this seems like two different poems. Especially when I read it out loud there is almost a change in tone. My initial thought is breaking this poem into two parts.

The other reason I went and posted this poem even though it comes off as fragmented is kind of an emotionally driven call and response. Almost like a poetic motif.

One being the venting the other a concise conclusion.
Though my first step will be a solid edit to help make it more clear and concise.

Also I really using the terms "living witness" and the "times heals wounds) clichè. Mainly because my experience with mental health that cliche has proven true in my life. I feel the the advice I give proceeding "living witness" requires a leap of faith (almost in the same way catholics take a leap of faith) knowing that what they believe can never be proved in its entirety.

Thanks again Knot