Forces of Nature-Edit

[galaxitchi]

tight rope army
defend the
between the lines, 
they raid reflections-
guard your marching mirrors.

defend duality - divine division 

fail to fly, fall into fire

strategy test.

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Hi Galaxichi,

I bolded the bits I like.  This is almost too much of a draft to critique.  Comes across more as notes for a poem.  But anyway, I like the bolded bits very much.

TqB

Thank you for the feedback! Can I ask what makes it across that way? What would make it a poem?