Hunter of Nightwatch
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(05-17-2023, 05:05 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote:  Hello Motion-

Hunter of Nightwatch  I have only changed one word, and deleted a couple
listens with elven ears.
What is lurking in the night
you will hunt with ease.
Strike with your bow, leave
all dead in your wake
a warning to those eavesdropping
on your kill.
Sound buoys along in one’s ear, you are dead  this whole part needs to be re-worked
hearing his crunchy footsteps.
Smell the rotting flesh from his enchanting slaughter.
Slaughter in the woods! Slaughter in the woods!
They shout.


Tighten up the ending and you could have an interesting tale.

Mark
Nice job Mark! Hopefully when I go through revisions it will turn out a little better than this.
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Messages In This Thread
Hunter of Nightwatch - by Poetry In Motion - 05-15-2023, 11:52 AM
RE: Hunter of Nightwatch - by TranquillityBase - 05-16-2023, 11:10 PM
RE: Hunter of Nightwatch - by Poetry In Motion - 05-17-2023, 12:45 AM
RE: Hunter of Nightwatch - by Mark A Becker - 05-17-2023, 05:05 AM
RE: Hunter of Nightwatch - by Poetry In Motion - 05-17-2023, 12:15 PM
RE: Hunter of Nightwatch - by rowens - 05-18-2023, 06:34 AM



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