Talisman(edit)

[brynmawr1]

Unfortunately not, I can’t even pinpoint what makes me say that. I’m an amateur and I’m required to attempt constructive critique.?

No worries.  I appreciate any suggestions.  I am new at this too.  Don't be afraid to put your stuff out there.  It is the only way to learn.

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Hi again,

Reading that last stanza again, I'm thinking you might could lose the last line, so that "because her father did" becomes the last line.  "she can" is a bit redundant.

TqB

Ha! I was surprised that line survived first review.  I left it is cause I like the rhythm of how it reads but I knew its existence was tenuous.  Thanks for coming back for the reread.
Take care,
bryn