Talisman(edit)

Talisman(edit)

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05-16-2023, 01:53 AM

Hi again,

Reading that last stanza again, I'm thinking you might could lose the last line, so that "because her father did" becomes the last line. "she can" is a bit redundant.

TqB

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Talisman(edit) - by brynmawr1 - 05-14-2023, 12:52 PM

RE: Talismans - by TranquillityBase - 05-14-2023, 09:48 PM

RE: Talismans - by brynmawr1 - 05-15-2023, 05:02 AM

RE: Talismans - by TranquillityBase - 05-15-2023, 06:31 AM

RE: Talisman(edit) - by Poetry In Motion - 05-15-2023, 11:46 AM

RE: Talisman(edit) - by galaxitchi - 05-15-2023, 10:24 PM

RE: Talisman(edit) - by brynmawr1 - 05-15-2023, 11:38 PM

RE: Talisman(edit) - by galaxitchi - 05-16-2023, 01:52 AM

RE: Talisman(edit) - by brynmawr1 - 05-16-2023, 07:14 AM

RE: Talisman(edit) - by TranquillityBase - 05-16-2023, 01:53 AM

RE: Talisman(edit) - by busker - 05-16-2023, 08:59 AM

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