Talisman(edit)
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(05-14-2023, 12:52 PM)brynmawr1 Wrote:  that’s a nice watch, I say,
between sips of cabernet, noticing
its wide silver band, how it lays
loose around her left wrist.  Thanks,
she says, twirling it with her right,
feeling the weight.
It’s an old omega, bought
on their honeymoon, it 
had chips in the crystal, needed
the new band.  I remember how
he wore it on 14 hour shifts
in the ER.  If he could do that,
then maybe I can get through
she says
my brother said a woman can’t
wear a watch like this-
 
but she does
and she will
because her father did
and she can.
Although I have to say, it is waay too ambiguous. Sure it is fine in some cases but still I just find it too ambiguous. I like the message but another thing:

I think it should be fourteen instead of '14'! Anyway, thanks for sharing here!
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Messages In This Thread
Talisman(edit) - by brynmawr1 - 05-14-2023, 12:52 PM
RE: Talismans - by TranquillityBase - 05-14-2023, 09:48 PM
RE: Talismans - by brynmawr1 - 05-15-2023, 05:02 AM
RE: Talismans - by TranquillityBase - 05-15-2023, 06:31 AM
RE: Talisman(edit) - by Poetry In Motion - 05-15-2023, 11:46 AM
RE: Talisman(edit) - by galaxitchi - 05-15-2023, 10:24 PM
RE: Talisman(edit) - by brynmawr1 - 05-15-2023, 11:38 PM
RE: Talisman(edit) - by galaxitchi - 05-16-2023, 01:52 AM
RE: Talisman(edit) - by brynmawr1 - 05-16-2023, 07:14 AM
RE: Talisman(edit) - by TranquillityBase - 05-16-2023, 01:53 AM
RE: Talisman(edit) - by busker - 05-16-2023, 08:59 AM



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