Catechism
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(01-29-2023, 10:55 PM)TranquillityBase Wrote:  Catechism

April is coming,
I can feel it in the rain.

Is three years long enough
to abstract the grief?

“John is gone” said my daughter
“Gone where?” was my startled response.

Even now it’s a question
no one can answer.

There was a time when you lived
and now a time after.

April will come
I can feel it in the rain.
Hey Tim,
Great piece.  I read it as couplets so that's how I arranged it and made some other word changes.  Admittedly, S3 doesn't work as well.  Glean what you can from my suggestions.
Take care,
steve
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Messages In This Thread
Catechism - by TranquillityBase - 01-29-2023, 10:55 PM
RE: Catechism - by Mark A Becker - 01-30-2023, 12:50 AM
RE: Catechism - by 71degrees - 01-30-2023, 02:28 AM
RE: Catechism - by brynmawr1 - 01-30-2023, 01:03 PM
RE: Catechism - by TranquillityBase - 01-31-2023, 11:17 PM
RE: Catechism - by Mark A Becker - 02-01-2023, 01:58 AM
RE: Catechism - by TranquillityBase - 02-01-2023, 11:54 PM
RE: Catechism - by 71degrees - 02-02-2023, 04:24 AM
RE: Catechism - by busker - 02-02-2023, 06:20 AM
RE: Catechism - by Mark A Becker - 02-03-2023, 05:32 AM



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