01-13-2023, 11:40 PM
It’s a clever piece of didacticism.
Some things to consider:
1) the title. It’s a clever poem, so can the title also be clever? Eg the first line or the last?
2) the first strophe reads a bit like a run on sentence. It might be better to lose the “while” and just break up S1 into 2 separate sentences
The new covid is a b****
A friend nearly died from it last month
Some things to consider:
1) the title. It’s a clever poem, so can the title also be clever? Eg the first line or the last?
2) the first strophe reads a bit like a run on sentence. It might be better to lose the “while” and just break up S1 into 2 separate sentences
The new covid is a b****
A friend nearly died from it last month