Homo naledi

[TranquillityBase]

Hey TqB,

Enjoyed the poem and the idea of it! Thoughts below.
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Accidental creatures
crawling deep into caves
to return their dead 
by flickering firelight
to the original dark. What if you were to change the tense from the present participle to the present simple?  Yes

Brains the size of oranges Might I suggest a fruit that's indigenous to the S. African region or even an extinct fruit that was a large part of the prehistoric human diet?   Hmmm....I'll see what I can find
they chitter and claw
feasting on antelope.
Predators cannot follow,
cock ears and listen, I think if you were to include "they...", this sentence would be easier to follow   OK

smell smoke and drift on. I don't really understand beginning another stanza at this line  Not completely clear on this but I think I get it.  I will experiment with it
Fresco of time’s children love this phrasing     thanks, this was a last gasp attempt on a weak line
watching their shadows
play on the cave walls could you omit "the"?  yes

their prehensile laughter Same critique as the first line from the previous stanza
does not forget the dead.
They wait for no God,
no Savior, only sunrise. Very nice finish

Thanks for the read and the critique.  I'll play with it some more.
TqB