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(12-22-2022, 03:09 AM)TranquillityBase Wrote:  
(12-22-2022, 02:42 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote:  Thanks Tim-  I lost my youngest brother very recently, and it should've been his birthday last week.  That's how this one came to mind...  It's a kinda, sorta Christmas poem. I should've written this as "closer than MY tears" or "OUR tears" instead of "YOUR" tears, since he no longer has tears, but I/we still do.
I did wonder about the owner of those tears, so that would be a good change.
I made the revision.
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light - by Mark A Becker - 12-21-2022, 07:50 AM
RE: light - by TranquillityBase - 12-21-2022, 10:53 PM
RE: light - by Mark A Becker - 12-22-2022, 02:42 AM
RE: light - by TranquillityBase - 12-22-2022, 03:09 AM
RE: light - by Mark A Becker - 12-22-2022, 03:44 AM
RE: light - by Poetry In Motion - 12-22-2022, 03:40 PM



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