Reaffirmation
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(12-18-2022, 10:11 AM)CRNDLSM Wrote:  
Reaffirmation 

Endless streams             coloring the memory
of fears and desires       thicker, heavier. catch
loose ends tangling      and collapse. although 
weaving, unravelling       always disorganized
deafening weight             from what you believe
of familial pressure        you yearn the righteous
and the roles laid            lessons to lead, run
down by ancestors        away with your needs
you are the earths           farewell to fascism
eruption to freedom        and dream, come true
you are the births            complete personification 
corruption, mutation       be the change you seek  
you are amazing              you can do anything
you are unique                you can make mistakes        these lines are the weakest....too inspirationally common
you can be alone             but you know you shouldn't you shouldn't                    have done that.
I enjoy all the different ways this can be read.  My first reaction was I found the last line a let down.  Or maybe it should be moved to below the two columns as a centered line holding them up

"You shouldn't have done that."

Just a thought.
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Reaffirmation - by CRNDLSM - 12-18-2022, 10:11 AM
RE: Reaffirmation - by TranquillityBase - 12-18-2022, 10:52 PM
RE: Reaffirmation - by s3 - 12-31-2022, 10:57 AM



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