The invisible currency (edit)

[brynmawr1]

Loopholes woven
weak points chosen-
a process gradually perfected.

Taught cryptic fiber
attracts the interdimensional spider-
vibrations quickly detected.

A venture more costly
than the replacement of money
that you no longer have
and keep on giving.





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Loopholes we weave
around the process of greed
gradually perfected.     nearly 

A web work so subtle
any rebuttal
was dissected.            easily deflected

Never a venture more costly     fruitful 
than the prevention of money       destruction
and it seems now            as
you've become greed.       currency is

Didn't like the edits. I liked the original first two stanzas as written but had to make adjustments for proper english.  Annoying.  I struggled the most with S3 as it didn't flow as well as the previous two.  So I thought it might work to reverse the narrative though S3 still isn't quite there.  Would love to see S3 follow the rhyme scheme.
Take care,
Bryn