12-13-2022, 09:36 AM
[quote="Mark A Becker" pid='262364' dateline='1670882307']
They crawled deep
into caves to return their dead
to the original dark,
guided by faltering firelight.
They quarreled and clawed
over scraps as hungry predators
listened
at the entrance. yes, definitely one more detail here
In a prehensile flicker of humanity,
sparked by the magic protection
of fire, they left shadows of language
scrawled on cave walls. great stanza
Guttural mantras echoed back
to their dead. These lines give me pause. I like laughter myself, but you've taken the poem into your own path
Did they expect some God, some Savior,
or only sunrise? and of course, this is the opposite of mine, I think.
By George!** He's hijacked my poem and.....made it positive
.
**"By (God and Saint) George" is an old English oath invoked immediately before charging into battle as late as World War I.
I think when we finish, we should send them to the anthropologist who made the discovery.
They crawled deep
into caves to return their dead
to the original dark,
guided by faltering firelight.
They quarreled and clawed
over scraps as hungry predators
listened
at the entrance. yes, definitely one more detail here
In a prehensile flicker of humanity,
sparked by the magic protection
of fire, they left shadows of language
scrawled on cave walls. great stanza
Guttural mantras echoed back
to their dead. These lines give me pause. I like laughter myself, but you've taken the poem into your own path
Did they expect some God, some Savior,
or only sunrise? and of course, this is the opposite of mine, I think.
By George!** He's hijacked my poem and.....made it positive
.**"By (God and Saint) George" is an old English oath invoked immediately before charging into battle as late as World War I.
I think when we finish, we should send them to the anthropologist who made the discovery.