11-06-2022, 07:35 AM
Sunrise waits for the nameless,
fire subsides to embers
breathing softly in the breeze.
The nameless have everything to say
as though speech were a fire
against silence.
Barking into the north wind,
to warn against the unnameable.
Maledictions fill the void
with touch.
Inside their identities
they swarm with meanings
that scar their faces
to repel each definition
and lay down
with the lion of morning.
I followed your drift and ended up with this. Yes, I did a workshop once and the teacher suggested eliminating all adjectives during editing.
fire subsides to embers
breathing softly in the breeze.
The nameless have everything to say
as though speech were a fire
against silence.
Barking into the north wind,
to warn against the unnameable.
Maledictions fill the void
with touch.
Inside their identities
they swarm with meanings
that scar their faces
to repel each definition
and lay down
with the lion of morning.
I followed your drift and ended up with this. Yes, I did a workshop once and the teacher suggested eliminating all adjectives during editing.