Chivalry
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(11-02-2022, 01:28 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote:  Chivalry

"May I?" she asked
as she walked up to the picnic table
with her lunch bag and drink.
"Sure."

She seemed pleasant enough
until a bee landed near my hand.
Suddendly she shouted, "KILL IT!"
"Why?'"
"Because I'm afraid of it!"
"So, you kill it."
"But you're the man."
"And it's just a little bee."
"Please," she implored,
offering helpless doe eyes.
"I'm still not killing it."
She jumped up to leave
saying, "some man you are."
I didn't reply
as she walked away
with that bee
on the straw of her drink.

As she disappeared
around the corner
I couldn't help but chuckle
when I heard her shrieks of terror.
Has this ever happened to anyone, ever? And how have you managed to make yourself/the narrator come off as the prick in this situation? And is this even a poem, or the ramblings of a man that hasn't quite made his mark on the world?

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Here's a more interesting edit...

"May I?" she asked
as she walked up to the picnic table 
with her lunch bag and drink.
—Sure.
A bee landed near my hand.
Suddenly she shouted, 
—KILL IT!

I shooed it away. 
And all was right with the world.
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Messages In This Thread
Chivalry - by Mark A Becker - 11-02-2022, 01:28 AM
RE: Chivalry - by The Karate Kid Part 2 - 11-02-2022, 03:41 AM
RE: Chivalry - by Mark A Becker - 11-02-2022, 11:03 AM
RE: Chivalry - by Mark A Becker - 11-02-2022, 11:24 PM
RE: Chivalry - by Semicircle - 11-02-2022, 05:07 AM
RE: Chivalry - by Tiger the Lion - 11-02-2022, 05:19 AM
RE: Chivalry - by The Karate Kid Part 2 - 11-02-2022, 05:55 AM
RE: Chivalry - by CRNDLSM - 11-02-2022, 05:59 AM



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