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[Poetry In Motion]

Hello in motion-

I subtracted almost everything, and was left with this:


a cut on my hand
bleeds my brains
on an index finger

I suggest letting the reality of a paper cut work as a metaphor for the pain that's in your head. I know that doesn't help very much, but I can't get to what is really bugging you since you're over-focused on the paper cut.  Using words like "f**king" for emphasis is far less effective than actually describing f**king.  Use concrete imagery, and be specific.

Mark

Thanks I will do that.