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[brynmawr1]

Succumb when         
you are ripe,
she knows 
when.                   There is something off about this first stanza.  Maybe "When ripe/ you(we) will succumb..."  Also "when" is used twice.  Maybe cut last one.


Thoughts peter    Kind of like the use of 'peter' as verb and maybe a name.
and resurge–
each step lands landing?
perfect.              perfectly?


Together
we are alone,    Like this phrase
she sees farther
than we ever could.


All in one,               Kind of want to reverse to 'One and all' but not sure I like that any better
a dull bulb.


Crowd silenced,
blinded, rotten–
their gods vanquished.   maybe 'our' since you use 'we' earlier


She remains.

Hi Sc
I find this to be very effective.  Although, (and don't take this the wrong way), I rarely really "get" your pieces.  I still enjoy the ambiguity, at least for me!
Thanks for the read,
steve