Flattened (Retro)

[CRNDLSM]

This is from NaPM 2015. I always liked it, but a few issues I never resolved were the repetition of the word "wasn't" in lines 1 and 2, and the shoddy punctuation throughout. 

Flattened (Retro)
 
It wasn’t the scenic route. Wouldn't start with 'it'
There wasn’t one.  Pretty weak sentence.
 
In Saskatchewan, the earth is still flat—
ask the locals. Are the locals Saskatchewan or talking about saskatchewan
 
We rolled west over beige carpet,
where the sun sets from noon ‘til midnight. These two lines are pretty great, 
 
It would burn your eyes out
if it weren’t for the bugs; 'it' again, this time more a country feel though so I dunno
 
specimens like you see pinned in museums— this description I understand, but specifying pinned then exploding, maybe specimens like 'exhibited'
exploding on the windshield, diffusing the light. 
 
In shifts, we scraped bloody windows
or rested bloody eyes.
 
Tomorrow, there would be mountains to climb.

Neat road trip idea, reminds me of fear and loathing in Las Vegas a bit,